What do you think of my book?

It got transcend towards the end in my opinion...
i cerebrate you should essay to use more teqniques,
like, ummm....
~semi colons
~senses - smell, touch, sound, zoom customary on details,
~more complex sentecses, e.g instead connected with "Susan coughed also spat saltwater on the deck"
you could put, "Susan's ocular unanticipatedly sock open; although letting exhausted a painful cough, which create among her sputter saltwater onto the, now slipperry, deck."
~when using speach latterly tell us how they said it also maybe what they're receptivity etc
But i be sweet on it well done :D Carry over writing (Y)
Hope this accompanied regularize just a lil' bit.